To Arden: Arden i felt that this was very insightful. the amount of detail you used when describing each day with your grandmother made me feel as if i were there with you. my favorite line from this post would have to be "As children we are mostly shielded away from death. No one ever brings it up; no one ever wants to talk about it. Movies are restricted for those under aged. That what age is it ok to know? Is there a right time for an explanation? I remember one of the first thoughts I had about dying. I thought of sleeping almost as being dead, I continued to think that really being dead simply meant you never woke up." i felt this was so true, i agreed with you completely and had some of the same questions myself however the idea of age restrictions in movies was something that never crossed my mind and i like how you brought it up. I have always thought of sleeping and death to be similar, in fact i have always thought that sleeping and death were related somehow but thats just my opinion.
To Johnny: Johnny i really enjoyed reading your blog, i felt that it was rich with information i enjoyed learning things that i didn't know happened to you, i feel like i got to know you more as a friend and a classmate. For that reason my favorite line is "I asked her, was there a time where the doctors were unjust and didn't seem to care about your medical problem. She then responded by saying yes i have and she then told me how when she was in her mid 30's she didn't have health insurance and because of that everyone that worked in that hospital didn't seem to care about her or her medical problem. She told me how she had to wait about 3-5 hours just to get medical help." While reading your post i could tell that this is something difficult to write and i commend you for putting it out there, i agree with you on the fact that this is unfair and i feel it happens too much, my father bruised his ribs one time and had to wait 3 hours just to get an x-ray telling him he was fine and should just take pain killers, but the funny thing is the doctor gave him the pain killers before he knew what was wrong with him, which showed how much he "cared" about his patients.
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From Mr.T (Attic Person)- I think my biggest question to this post is Why? The message you haProxy-Connection: keep-alive
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ed is about hope and perseverance. To paraphrase: people diagnosed with terminal illnesses should accept death because only that will allow them to live a full life in the time they have remaining. My question would be: why do we want them to? The surface answer is obvious; we want them to enjoy themselves as much as they can while they can. But I wonder if there is another level to it. Are we getting something out of their good cheer and brave face as they contemplate death? How does it affect us if they do not maintain a brave exterior? How is being around a sad dying person the same and different from one who is at peace? Is it easier for us, the friends, the loved ones, society at large, to accept death if the dying person herself has already accepted it?
From Johnny- Sharif your whole blog waas very interesting intriguing and i could tell that you put alot of depth into this piece. The line that really stood out to me is, "She is starting to let the illness live her life for her." This reminds me of my grandmother because like yours she too is ill, acting differently and thinking differently giving me the idea that she is letting the illness live her life. This made me realize that as time keeps on going our grandparetns will keep on getting older and closer to death.
From Steven (basement person)- It is great that you are able to analyze the differences from detachment, and the process in which you get there. I also noticed that you used a very powerful quote, with deep analysis. It is also good that you can look at the causes of death, and make that a factor in your thought process. You have written this in depth, and it shows that you put a lot of thought into this. However, by viewing your story from an outside perspective and not having the same experiences as you, i disagree and think that i would always want someone by my side if i was in the hospital. I can see what your thinking, and understand why you wouldn't, but if a member of my family was in the hospital, i would want to be with them all the time.As you move on in this unit, i would challenge you to find more quotes from different sources. It seems that you have used "Morrie" a lot and you even used the same quote twice in this writing. I feel like it would make your writing a lot stronger if you had a bigger variety of sources. Overall-great work! I enjoyed read this.
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Comments regarding elevator speeches:
To Tamiko- Tamiko, I felt your speech was very confident. The way you presented yourself made me feel confident with you. You used a personal connection to a family member which i felt was very important to do when giving speeches in general, you want to make the audience fell with you and feel for you. The one part i especially liked about your presentation is the fact that you left me wanting to hear more, you didnt go into any topic too deep but deep enough that i wanted to hear and learn more of your project. The one thing i would suggest is to use statistics to help further support what your saying.
To Arden- Arden, I felt that your speech was great, in fact it was my favorite. You kept me engaged the whole time by using your personal connection (your grandmother). i felt apart of your presentation as if it were connected to me as well. I had read your blog before hand but i would have definetly gone to read it if i had not read it before. the one specific thing that i liked about your presentation was your prop. the picture you had of your grandmother pre-cancer really got to me. In the picture you could tell she was happy and healthy. the other thing i liked was that you mentioned your grandmothers belief on the after life which i not only thought was interesting but a good way to give us some insight into your grandmother,
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